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Monday, January 18, 2010

Carry On Tuesday #36

Written for and posted to carry on tuesday
also posted to MondayPoetryTrainRevisited.

The prompt this week is from Robert Browning's
Grow Old Along With Me
Grow old along with me
the best is yet to be.


I used the line the best is yet to be, which I inserted into
the rewriting/updating of a piece I wrote a few years back.
The original poem is a stand alone piece and todays offering
is to be treated as something new, which it is, because I have
something new and fresh to say on the matter. Phew!

                                                                            
GOT YOUR LETTER
(STILL)
I got your letter yesterday
How I wish you could come to stay
Even though you're so far away
You wrote a note to say that you
Miss me need me want me love me

You are my sun you are my moon
You are my lyric and my tune
You are my midnight and my noon
So please please come back some day soon

Miss you need you want you love you
Don't you know that I love you too?

Although that was five years ago
Nothing's changed I still love you so
The best is yet to be you know
Oh yeah, have you still got my ring?
I want you more than anything

You are my sun you are my moon
You are my lyric and my tune
You are my midnight and my noon
So please please come back someday soon

Miss you need you want you love you
Don't you know that I love you three? 
Repeat
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12 comments:

  1. SandyCarlson18 Jan 2010, 03:03:00

    A very beautiful poem, Andy. I enjoyed your blog.

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  2. Rinkly Rimes18 Jan 2010, 11:07:00

    I like 'You are my lyric and my tune'. Nice.

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  3. Julia Phillips Smith18 Jan 2010, 16:19:00

    Same as Rinkly Rimes - 'You are my lyric and my tune' - stood out for me.

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  4. Cassiopeia Rises18 Jan 2010, 17:17:00

    Andy, what a lovely love poem. I love your use of repetition and your images are beautiful. You nailed it.
    I too love your work. Well done

    Melanie

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  5. Yousei Hime18 Jan 2010, 19:24:00

    Lovely and sad together. Thank you for this.

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  6. Ariel18 Jan 2010, 20:50:00

    Very nice. Good rhyming. I think these lines came from your heart.

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  7. Stan Ski18 Jan 2010, 21:43:00

    I didn't know you cared...
    Seriously though, this is a great sentiment.

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  8. Anonymous19 Jan 2010, 00:02:00

    Awwww..sweet. I really like the repetitions,

    and that line,

    Miss you need you want you love you
    Don't you know that I love you too?

    Thanks for visiting me too.

    -Irene

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  9. Anonymous19 Jan 2010, 01:55:00

    Thank YOu for coming by, i could discover you.

    Loved this one but my fav fav lines are
    "You are my sun you are my moon

    You are my lyric and my tune

    You are my midnight and my noon

    So please please come back someday soon"

    I almost wished i had written this, beautiful Andy. Have a great day!

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  10. Anonymous19 Jan 2010, 03:04:00

    this seems very much like a song lyric, very sweet

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  11. Larry19 Jan 2010, 04:54:00

    Nicely done even if it was a couple three years ago today is my first time I read it it's nicely done anyway.


    For My Wife

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  12. lissa19 Jan 2010, 14:39:00

    it's is like a song and I especially like the lines - You are my lyric and my tune - wonderful hypnotic

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