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Saturday, May 23, 2009

Carry On Tuesday #1

This week the prompt at Carry on Tuesday is the
opening lines of A Walk After Dark by W. H. Auden


Here's mine:


THE SMORNING

a

cloudless night

like this can set the

spirit soaring, up up up to

the man in the moon, they call

him loony tuney, he’s pushing up daisies

and we’ll all be joining him soon.

I saw him ‘the smorning’ poking

the ground with a twig.

I said, what are you

smokin’ man?

strokin’ the

deck

like

that?

and he replied, I’m searching for

moon dust, it falls before

morning, and I’m hoping

it’ll stick to this ‘ere

honey dipper and

sparkle like gold

to ward off

the cold.

092205

8 comments:

  1. Thanks for the prompt Keith, and I wish you every success in this venture.
    -Andy

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  2. Very creative. It's like a concrete poem. Welcome to the circle.

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  3. beautiful, it is great dream and the structure is wonderful as well

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  4. I like the poking image. Wish I could do that to the moon and then some...

    :D

    changing orbits

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  5. This reads good and looks good! Welcome aboard and thanks for you support.

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  6. very tough to do this...u r a genius!!I've a new poem...pls do c it.

    www.deepteshpoetry.blogspot.com

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  7. Love it, what an imaginative poem.

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