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Monday, May 18, 2009

Monday Poetry Train Revisited #28

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HANG OUT

She loves me, she loves me not, so I must be barking

up the wrong tree. Where did I go wrong, I wrestle

with love, I whistle into the wind? I hang out in the

poetry garden, alone with my thoughts once again.

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An American Sandwich, it's time for you to take a bite...

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Hot spice with no rice

noughty as a round number

thick as cucumber

AS COOL AS A SUMMERS DAY

thick as cucumber

naughty as a wrong number

hot spice is so nice

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14 comments:

  1. Lluvia18 May 2009, 03:57:00

    Cool (as a cucumber) poem!

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  2. Andy Sewina18 May 2009, 08:17:00

    Thanks Lluvia!

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  3. anthonynorth18 May 2009, 09:16:00

    Liked both of these. I've been experimenting with these forms today. Not sure whether it works though.

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  4. gautami tripathy18 May 2009, 10:31:00

    That poetry garden offers love and peace, does it not?

    Cool as cucumber...

    two hearts

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  5. Anonymous18 May 2009, 11:44:00

    this was nice one, i liked those little changes between the simliar lines.

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  6. Julia Phillips Smith18 May 2009, 15:33:00

    This is nice:

    'I hang out in the poetry garden, alone with my thoughts once again.'

    Even though the narrator would rather be with a special someone.

    And I like this one, too:

    'noughty as a round number
    naughty as a wrong number'

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  7. Andy Sewina18 May 2009, 15:34:00

    Hi Tony, I liked you club sandwich!

    Hi Gautami, thank god for the poetry garden.

    Thanks Utopianfragments, glad you spotted them.

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  8. Andy Sewina18 May 2009, 15:40:00

    Thanks Julia, I think the narrator has been unlucky in love before.

    Glad you liked the round vs wrong number.

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  9. Linda Jacobs19 May 2009, 01:16:00

    I love the idea of a poetry garden!

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  10. Jeeves19 May 2009, 05:51:00

    cool, cool

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  11. andy19 May 2009, 10:19:00

    Hi Linda, It's wonderful in the poetry garden, I like the wild flowers best, especially the ones that everybody else thinks are just weeds.

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  12. andy19 May 2009, 10:20:00

    Hi Jeeves, you're cool too!

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  13. Anonymous19 May 2009, 16:08:00

    i love ur Sandwiches !! and this time u added cucumbers too ;)

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  14. Andy Sewina20 May 2009, 01:19:00

    Hi Pretty You!! Don't you just love cucumber? Oscar Wilde wrote about cucumber sandwiches 120 years ago!

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