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Monday, May 18, 2009

Monday Poetry Train Revisited #28

Written for MPTR - You can post here too!


HANG OUT

She loves me, she loves me not, so I must be barking

up the wrong tree. Where did I go wrong, I wrestle

with love, I whistle into the wind? I hang out in the

poetry garden, alone with my thoughts once again.

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An American Sandwich, it's time for you to take a bite...

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Hot spice with no rice

noughty as a round number

thick as cucumber

AS COOL AS A SUMMERS DAY

thick as cucumber

naughty as a wrong number

hot spice is so nice

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14 comments:

  1. Cool (as a cucumber) poem!

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  2. Liked both of these. I've been experimenting with these forms today. Not sure whether it works though.

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  3. That poetry garden offers love and peace, does it not?

    Cool as cucumber...

    two hearts

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  4. this was nice one, i liked those little changes between the simliar lines.

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  5. This is nice:

    'I hang out in the poetry garden, alone with my thoughts once again.'

    Even though the narrator would rather be with a special someone.

    And I like this one, too:

    'noughty as a round number
    naughty as a wrong number'

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  6. Hi Tony, I liked you club sandwich!

    Hi Gautami, thank god for the poetry garden.

    Thanks Utopianfragments, glad you spotted them.

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  7. Thanks Julia, I think the narrator has been unlucky in love before.

    Glad you liked the round vs wrong number.

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  8. I love the idea of a poetry garden!

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  9. Hi Linda, It's wonderful in the poetry garden, I like the wild flowers best, especially the ones that everybody else thinks are just weeds.

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  10. Hi Jeeves, you're cool too!

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  11. i love ur Sandwiches !! and this time u added cucumbers too ;)

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  12. Hi Pretty You!! Don't you just love cucumber? Oscar Wilde wrote about cucumber sandwiches 120 years ago!

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