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Wednesday, May 20, 2009

Three Word Wednesday CVXXXIII

Written out of the top of my head for 3WW
the given words this week were:
efficient, optimize and treacherous.

Here's mine:


concave plastic notel open both ends

the honeymoon suite for my poetry friends

efficient as a mobile home that rolls

rocks when the drunk kicks it on his way past

hums when some bum sicks up all over it

and this is home to the best poet I know

and he has holes in the soles of his shoes

and wears musty and old hand me down clothes

and he lives in a plastic pipe that rolls

he and his princess the poetess goddess

they scrawl their poetry on the concave walls

in a shared red and blue blood mixed with love

propped up against the square peg plywood door

they optimise their day writing poetry

newsprint curtains blankets street sheets scream same

the best poet in the world and his princess

the treacherous candle burning both ends

they can only dream about a hot bath

the only shower they get is the rain

out there alone but not lonely white cold



  1. Love this! The lines are so alive! The sounds are wonderful, too!

  2. Andy, this is fantastic. The lines have this sing-song feel, but say something, too. I am wowed.

  3. It is a great pleasure to read this. True poets do starve and live in plastic sheeted homes.And whats wrong with the rains as shower?!

    no pawns spared

  4. Exceptional! This is from the heart. Powerful, meaningful - everything.

  5. Wow. Powerful. And this was off the top of your head?

  6. The words cling, clang and come together. Truly loved it

  7. I could dance off into the sky reading/singing this. Love it!

  8. I thought of them living their lives filling it with the only beauty they could express with their circumstance. good post.

  9. Great poem, packed full with so much. Wow!!

  10. Wonderful things then bubble to the surface of your cranium!

  11. I loved that he was the greatest poet with his princess. This was fabulous. -Meg