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Saturday, January 16, 2010

One Single Impression Prompt 99

The prompt at One Single Impression is: Chaos.

Here's an American Sandwich:

Chaos reigned in his dreams, he thought it was her he was making love with. She was so squishy when they kissed, she felt so real, so hot in his arms. He had wanted her for so long, but she was just another bad dream.

Here's a link to one I did for you last year:
Clink- Me-Here.. The Spectral Tarsier.


  1. The American Sandwich game... Flash Fiction in 51 syllables, with a poetic filling.
    Write a piece of flash fiction in just three American Sentences. Allen Ginsberg's American Sentence has seventeen syllables. Your task is to use as few words as possible to fill the sandwich.
    Take a bite...
    Okay, it's your turn to have a go at the American Sandwich. Simply write a piece of poetic flash fiction in three Sentences. Remember, each American Sentence has seventeen syllables.

    Post it on your blog and leave a permalink to it in my comments (on The American Sandwich game.. post). Come back to see what other people have written and visit them too. Please comment on participants work, to help build a community.

  2. Hey Andy, this is good! It looks like fun too. I like doing fun things so it might be for me, but not today.
    And yes, I've had those bad dreams, I guess we all have. I like the ones where in a half sleep I try to get things corrected.
    That grey SUV in the corner was the one we rented in Barcelona and drove up to the Carcassonsne, France, area. Our hotel was in Caunes-Minervois, a little to the northeast of Carcassonsne. We stayed there and in Barcelona for a week, then went to Paris, etc, for another week. Some of that is on the 'Label' link.

  3. Thanks Jim, we went to The Sagrada de Familia in Barcelona and checked out the Gaudi buildings there, we then drove north to Figures and had a look at the Dali stuff. i'll check your links when I get a chance.

  4. Sounds like one of my better dreams...

  5. Hope you wake up soon! Ah, but those bad ones, they have a way of lingering. Nice take on the prompt.

  6. Hi Andy;

    I wonder why we always dream of some chaotic situations wherein somebody whom we silently love is always involved.

    Nicely written Andy. I can relate, honestly!

    Btw, thanks for your wonderful comments in my work.



  7. perfect !!!

    ps: m so happy that naisaiku is back :D !!

  8. Nice! And it doesn't always happen at night! :)

  9. I think I have had one of those dreams. While I was reading, I was thinking about how much air it takes to minimize the squishiness. :)
    All "beyond" chaos.

  10. I know those dreams..good job!

  11. Very interestingly done! That seems like a challenge to make one of those up- you did a great job with it!

  12. it is always so enjoyable to come by for a visit to see yr latest creation.... i am still thinking abt this word squishy...**smiling**

  13. I have known such dreams. They hurt!

  14. I love this form! Your story was at once palpable, baroque, fantastic. Allen Ginsburg seems like the perfect pilot for "chaos".

    Thank you for your heartfelt response to my poem.

  15. Thank you so much for all of your wonderful comments. If you've ever thought of playing the American Sandwich game.. Right now is as good a time as any, and we have some brand new game forms for you to try.